Please do something手机已经成为一种新的毒品

Lynette

亲，写得挺好的，不过确实有点小建议之类的

Lynette

叶凝云 发表于 2013-10-26 16:31
什么建议？

就是关于语法方面的一点建议

Lynette

Lynette 发表于 2013-10-26 19:26
就是关于语法方面的一点建议

我这叫委婉含蓄

Lynette

With the growth of information technology,the number of Phubbing,Chinese word "低头族",has been gettrng stronger and bigger. People are becoming more and more indifferent, they abondon themselves into the mobile phones deeper,especially the smart ones,being widely used.




The furthest distance in the world is when the murderer is standing in front of you while you don't pay any heed to him.Last month,a sphomore student Justin Valdez was killed when he was in the subway, in San Francisco.The monitor of the subway shown that the murderer took out of his gun several times before the murder.But the shame was that all the people sitting around  were keeping their eyes on their own phones and didn't concern the murder.

The same things have happened again and again ,in the subway, in the shops or supermarkets and so on so forth. It is time to  stop phubbing.The world should be filled with love but not distance.

Lynette

叶凝云 发表于 2013-10-27 22:59
对了吗？

应该差不多了吧